Wish Upon a Star...

[g-racer21]

I am like a shooting star,
Random and unpredictable.
Constantly flying from place to place,
Never standing still.

At times I wish to remain unseen,
To just observe the world around me.
Like a gentle glow in the distance.
Other days I feel like shining bright,
For all the world to see.

I will always be there,
No matter if you can?t see me.
Someone to whisper your secrets to,
I?ll keep them safe from harm.

Though sometimes I fall,
To float lazily about,
Wasting away the day,
Waiting for the darkness of night,
To let my true light shine out.

I am like a shooting star,
Teasing all the world.
Never long in your sight,
But always passing through.

[Hannibal]

I love the way that peice was ended!

Welcome to the board, and a nice opening peice.
Lots of promise in there... a lot of really good snipits to be had in there.

Glad to see you've made it here, Hope you stay [img]smile.gif[/img]

[crazy a]

That's not bad. I like it. It's not too dressed-up, it's to-the-point. I can re-read it 'cause I like it, not because I didn't get it the first time around. Not bad at all.

[machinery]

first, welcome to the board. and like han said, continue to post. we need more pioneers.

and like a said, it was easy to read.

and a total sidenote: chris, why do you spell piece like peice?

i don't get it. you always do it.

ok, back to life, back to reality (oh god)

i want more from you. it just seemed like you were telling me that you are a star. i want more more more more more.

right now, it is sort of blah.


i'm am being honest.

[Hannibal]

i do that? DAMN.
bad habit i guess... shit.. i even go back and revise when i think it's spelled wrong...
when in reality - it's probably spelled right! shit!

[g-racer21]

Merchinery, well i know my stuff needs a lot of work. I'm a beginner at this ;0) "Wish Upon a Star" was just something i had to write for an english class..."relate yourself to an object from nature" and thats how this "poem" was born! and i foolishly told Chris about it and here i am!but i thank you for your advice! ;0)